ROOM 219

virtual extension of the ESL classroom

Diamond poetry

Sunlight – Star Dust

Sunlight
dominant, direct,
vivacious, vital, vast,
flooding, sparkling, penetrating,
victory, vigor, vibration,
might mystery
vagueness, vacuum, vertigo
filtering, setting, perishing,
vincible, vagrant, void
distant, diffused
Star Dust


The Elements: Fire – Water

To play these short films, click on the file name displayed on my wiki accessed via the following links:
http://nimitz13.wikispaces.com/file/detail/Diamond_Sunlight_Stardust_w_sun_stars.wmv
http://nimitz13.wikispaces.com/file/detail/Diamond_Fire_Water.wmv

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April 16, 2010 - Posted by | Uncategorized

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  1. This mosaic is a very special mosaic i see how light reflects and projects a beam beautiful colors. Also how a small object like that has such an impact on light. This inspires me to be more open to the object that we mange to put in our art of life.

    Comment by Fernando Rodriguez | May 28, 2010 | Reply

  2. the mosaic are really preaty specialy when you put alot of diferent colors on it . theres alot of people that they try to do there mosaic diferents from the others they doit just to make conpetition with others.to make this kinds of projects you have to have akots of pations to make a mosaic.
    To started making the mosaic you meed to have a piece of black paper. it looks like about one Ft and a half by two Ft.you got to use white chalk and draw what you really want to have on your mosaic.. to make this project look realy good you need put alot of time on it and do your bets so you can get a good grade on it.

    Comment by Juan Carlos Funes | May 27, 2010 | Reply

    • I did mine mosaic by picking bright color so it could look really well. I got my idea from the Internet i wanted to do it better but it was to hard.. I try mi best and it came aout with a really good peace of art.

      Comment by Jaun carlos Funes | May 28, 2010 | Reply

  3. I am currently in Art 1. One of the things we have learned to do is make mosaics. Mosaics are a type of art form that includes gluing small pieces in order to make a big one. One of the things that make this form interesting is that when you stand up close you don’t get the full view, but when you take a few steps back you do.
    Mosaics are made my fist gathering up ideas and then sketching them on the paper. After you sketch you ideas on the paper you then have to come up with the color arrangements. It is very important to come up with the right colors. Colors set the tone and mood of the piece, and therefore it is important to make the right choices. After you have come up with the colors it is then important to start gluing all the pieces together. After you glue the pieces together you have to make sure it all looks correct and together. Many people in my class did not follow all these rules and therefore did not get the best results.
    After you have completed all the steps it is then very important to title and name the project. One should come up with a name that is both interesting and important. Mosaics are one of the most interesting things I have learned so far in this year. They have taught me that individual things do make a difference and make up the whole.
    After all the gluing and shaping and coloring has happened, you will be finished with the project. Most students don’t like this project because of all the time it takes to do it, but in the end it should all be worth it. I found this project to be very beneficial and exciting.

    Comment by Henry Solorzano | May 27, 2010 | Reply

  4. In my mosaic I did a viking with a colorful helmet. Showing bright in my mosaic made it seem as a happy enviroment. The viking shows me that nimitz is a place with succesful students and a whole school with mature students. non-trouble makers.
    Mosaics are a very important when it comes to art. Mosaics are made by a big amount of paper pieces that you put together to create an image of something that looks like a regular picture. There are like a digital camera picture that it is made of millions of pixels but this is by paper.
    This was my favorite piece of art I have done in my Art 1 class, it was a hard work but when your finishes with it you are impressed. Mosaics shouldn’t be done in a rush you need to take your time to make it well. My mosaic wasn’t finished but if I were to finish it I would take my time and let the art happen.

    Comment by Jose M | May 27, 2010 | Reply

  5. Mosaics are a form of art work, that would not be possible without the individual little pieces. When we look very closely at a mosaic we only see the little pieces that make it up, but when we stand back we get the effect of the whole picture. Mosaics can be used in a variety of different ways. They can be used to convey either a positive or negative message. They can have very vivid colors, or they can have dull and ordinary colors. These colors not only set up the tone, but also set up the whole interpretation of the artwork.
    It has been said that art is developed in the eyes of the viewer. If an individual sees the art as abstract then he or she will interpret it in that specific way. Our lives are influenced by not only the people around us, but also the art that we surround ourselves with. If we are around positive and influencing art then we ourselves will also become positive. It has also been said that to know a culture the best, all one would have to do is study the culture’s art. Art is the way we communicate and think about our surroundings in a specific time period. Without art we would be in a world where no one could communicate with one another and express the ideas in their minds and hearts.
    One of my favorite types of art works are mosaics. Mosaics represent unity and the importance of individual pieces. It shows us that without the little pieces we cannot have the whole picture. Mosaics are not an easy task to make. First you must develop an idea, next you must sketch the drawing on the paper, and finally start gluing the little pieces together. In the end you should have a product that represents a whole picture and one that represents your thoughts and emotions. Mosaics are most famous for their vivid colors and texture.
    Textures are created by emphasizing specific areas in the art work more or less then other areas. Colors are also very important because they represent the tone and emotion of the specific piece. If one includes very strong and vibrant colors he or she will convey a message of one that is strong and emotional. It is up to the artist to make sure the artwork is neat and conveys the proper message.
    When doing a mosaic the most important thing to do is make small, exact pieces. The smaller the pieces the better the picture will look from far away. It is also up to the artist to make sure the colors are together, and somewhat blend together. It is also important when working with mosaics to make sure you don’t put too much glue. Putting too much glue can result in the destruction of the work as a whole. So when making a mosaic there are many steps to take in order to get the best results. One is to make the colors go with each other, then it is advised to make small pieces, and last don’t put too much glue. With these steps it will guarantee a better result. I followed all these advices and therefore had a good result.
    Mosaics are an art form that will continue throughout time. Some forms are diamond shaped others are abstract. Whatever type of form, mosaics will always will be a vital part of the art world, and our society. Making them are difficult, but the end it is worth it. Standing back and seeing how the small pieces made one big one is a phenomenon in the art realm.

    Comment by Kevin Chacko 4B | May 27, 2010 | Reply

  6. Mosaics are a very important type of art to the art world

    Comment by Jose. M | May 27, 2010 | Reply

  7. Mosiacs are a very unique form of art. It allow the artist to use their imagination and sence of creativity and turn it into a masterpiece. That every one can see.
    A mosiac is like a puzzle you use smaller pieces to make one big picture. Also the colors play a big part in making the picture come to life. Leaving negative space inbetween each piece.
    Making a mosiac is simple all you need it creativity and patiance to do one. It takes time but it can be done. And you can have a work of art.

    Comment by Yvonne Armijo | May 27, 2010 | Reply

  8. The structure of the color in these mosiac’s are dramatic. The art work on the structure really brings out the colorful art work. The piece shows many meanings, because of the shapes and colors on the mosiac.

    I like how they included different colors on the mosiac so that it can actually show a picture. The pieces have a value to it, because of the giving shape and colors. It must have been hard to do the mosiac, but it came out looking excellent at the end.

    There both mosiac’s that had amazing features to the sturtures. The art work shows that the owners really put effort into there work. Art is an amazing class, because of the awesome projects and things that we get to do.

    Comment by Nemanja Draca | May 25, 2010 | Reply

    • Mosiacs can represent different ideas, like the diamond poems. Both can represent feelings, ideas, by using your imagination, and creativity. I think either one can be good to represent the value of something.

      Comment by Lucero | May 27, 2010 | Reply

  9. The star dust photo is a magnificant piece of art work. It has a child look,but a very professional look about it. It has a sort of presence that grants this work being good.

    The way the colors and how the person created this mosaic is a way that most people would create, but how this photo is betrayed as in a diamond makes this picture stand out. This photo shows the sun and and its primal being that most peple take advantage for.

    To a conclusion this photo is a good piece of art work. I would not recommend this art work to be siplayed in a musem, but I do say this is a good structural piece of work and that this person diserves a good job!

    Comment by Kingsley Brown | May 25, 2010 | Reply

    • We always meet in the hallway, but never have time to talk. I’m glad you chose to comment on this post. The original images are manipulated as a diamond because they were chosen for a poem shaped as a diamond. The texts on this blog do not look like diamond because I did not know, nor had time to figure out, how to center the text. If you look at Wiki and watch short films driven by the text, you’ll see my point. It was a writing assigment in my classes to create compare-contrast poetic text based on mosaic art. There are multimedia projects with text, sound, and images. I just cannot find an hour or so to upload them to my Wiki.

      Comment by Dr.M | May 25, 2010 | Reply

  10. I like the colors and the texture .The colors really respond with one another.When i did my mosaque i wish it could of came out like that .

    It looks like the artist was thibnking real postive. When he drew this picture.Because their not dull and they really pop out at you .The work is real simple but really creative at the same time he doesnt go over the top. Like other artist do.

    The work makes me reflect on how vibrant colors are always going to catch your eye . So i think this artist deserves a lot of credit.

    Comment by Horacio Castillo | May 25, 2010 | Reply

  11. Mosaics are such a cool idea. They are really creative and they take alot of work. I love all the colors and shapes that were made in both the mosaics.

    I like the one on the black paper with all the bright colors because the colors stand out so much and it catches your attention. And the fact that it is one of the album covers for Pink Floyd is pretty cool too:)

    And lastly i liked the fact that the mosaics are all so different and not one of them looks like another.

    Comment by tess alderete:) | May 24, 2010 | Reply

  12. i like the colors and the texture .it makes me reflect on how pretty the work is .the coloros work good along each other.the work is extradonary i wish i could draw something like that . It loos like the artist really was thinking positiv when he drew this because the colors are real positive and they pop out at you. the work is real creative but simple at the same time he didnt go over the top like omther artist who try to hard.i like how the things camouflage with each 0ther but dont really overlap,but i think he could of done a better job with the details

    Comment by Horacio Castillo | May 21, 2010 | Reply

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  14. buterfly
    buterfly
    pretty small
    exploring flying traveling
    makin a beautiful world
    always looking for a bether place
    sining surprising flying
    beautiful colorful
    two birds

    Comment by my6 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  15. the boot is very useful and pretty
    it represent state of texas.
    the snake is dangerous, she is crawling and biting.
    ===
    This is a paraphrase in prose of your original structure. Please repeat the diamond text for the purpose of revising or accept this reading:
    ===
    A cowboy boot
    with silver spurs
    kicking
    on the rugged terrain of Texas
    – guarding the territory –
    on the Texan rough rug
    coiling
    with brown bands
    A copperhead snake

    Comment by JR7 | May 5, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept
      Process: I stared planing my ideas in how the picture was.
      Problems:in how to express my ideas.
      Solutions:i combine all my ideas and to put them all together.
      Lessons learned:
      Text
      Process: I looked at the picture and analyze what I was watching.
      Problems: I had problem in how to star writing about the picture.
      Solutions: I though about the thing I was looking out to organize what I was going to write.
      Lessons learned:that if you really concentrate in what you are doing you could do it good.

      Comment by jacqueline T : ) | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  16. Earth
    big round
    amazing surprising revealing
    moon clouds
    sun rainbow
    fascinating exciting outstanding
    high blue
    sky

    Comment by jacqueline T : ) | May 5, 2010 | Reply

  17. Godzilla
    Rugged Enormous Appalling
    Suffering Sadness
    lonely
    and
    wanting
    wanted
    and
    loving
    Feeling Felicitous
    Delicate Small Appealing
    Flowers
    ====
    As your editor, I suggest this change:
    Work in progress – see the revised text above.
    I wonder what you’ll do about capitalization.
    ====
    Godzilla
    Funny Enormous Scary Sadness Suffer

    Plant Give Creature Take

    Happiness Love

    Beautiful Small Attractive

    Flowers

    Comment by LS | May 5, 2010 | Reply

    • Video
      Process: We got the pictures from Ms Marchenko’s wiki page,we also found more pictures in the internet. We saved the pictures in the folder images. We loaded in movie maker. We decided to use transitions(page Curl ,Up Right) to moved from image to image.
      Problems:We didn’t give credits to pictures from the internet,and some of the pictures didn’t synchronize with the soundtrack.
      Solutions:A good solution will be to document our sources.
      Lessons learned:We learned to always appreciate what other people do.
      Audio (voice, music)
      Process: We used audacity to record our poems.We exported mp3 file from audacity.
      Problems:We had problems:First we didn’t know how to say the words. Our technical problem was that we didn’t have our laptops,we were loosing our work.
      Solutions:Practice,Do it again or Save it in our H drives.
      Lessons learned:We learned how to export mp3 file from audacity to movie maker.

      Comment by LS1 | May 17, 2010 | Reply

  18. Flowers
    pieces of paper for petals of flowers
    the sun of the spring
    the light of the garden
    the freedom of the birds
    the sound of the natural music
    fragment of seeds for the peaks of the birds
    Birds
    =====
    As your editor, I suggest this reading of your poem:
    =====
    Pieces of paper for flowers’ petals –
    the sun of the spring,
    the light of the garden.
    In a floral display,
    flower mosaics flow:
    dream – life
    afloat.

    Fragments of fabric for birds’ feathers –
    the wings of freedom,
    the song of nature.
    In avian play,
    fluorescent mosaics fly:
    life – art
    alive.
    ====
    Note:
    You can still print this verse in a shape of a diamond with this recital pattern.
    Now, your poem has both parallel structures and alliteration.
    In addition, it has rhyme and assonance. Your original idea and expression is a reader’s heaven – it allows to read the text on 3 levels:
    1) on the line – the actual description (flowers and birds as shown in the artwork);
    2) between the line – relation between concepts (the power to see similarities between flowers and birds as symbols of spring);
    3) beyond the line – a connection with the world and human understanding of it (interplay between real life and art evokes a special feeling that reality and imagination are not separate from each other but may exist as one).

    Comment by Em07 | May 4, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept:

      Process: I saw the picture and make my conclusion of the picture. I wrote my ideas about what I though related to the picture to create a poem.

      Problems: I have a problem in how organize my ideas to create my poem relating the two ideas.

      Solution: I wrote all my ideas and also I ask for help to the teacher.
      Lesson Learned: I learn to combine two ideas and became in a one poem.

      Text:
      Process: I choose words to use in the diamond poem
      problems: I have troubles with the order of the words.
      Solution: I ask for help to the teacher.
      Lesson Learned: I learned how combine ideas.

      Comment by Em07 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  19. Fresh azalea
    colorful petals
    growing living smiling
    the promise of the future, the pain of the past
    drooping dying crying
    dry branches
    Old willow.

    Comment by eg7 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept:
      Process: I wrote a poem using two different pictures from art work. The picture were a old tree and a young flower. Using a personal experience.
      Problems: I had a problem with the flower, because I did not know the name of the flower I looked in the internet but I could not found the name.
      Solutions: I did not found the mane so Dr. Marchenko helped me to find out the name. She looked in a oxford picture dictionary and she gave ideas. I choose the one that I thought that was the right one .
      Lessons learned: I learned that some times we need the help from other people, and we need to ask for better results.

      Text:
      Process: I just wrote ideas that came to my mind.
      Problems:I did know how to started to write those ideas to make a paragraph
      Solutions: I saw the pictures and my ideas and tried to figure out and I did it.
      Lessons learned:some times we have to think a little bit hard to get a solution.

      Comment by eg7 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  20. CHEERY’S TREE
    leafy, bright
    growing, producing,giving
    sun, cheeries, eyes, moon
    surviving, hunting, taking
    furry, dark
    WOLVES

    ====
    As your editor, I suggest the following reading with a very meaningful period dividing the two parts:
    ====
    CHERRY TREE,
    growing branches and root,
    gaining leaves and cherries,
    giving the sweet and the sweetness,
    under the sun
    stand bright
    .
    must fight
    under the moon
    taking the weak and the weakness,
    roaming forests and prairies,
    hunting fortune for food,
    FURRY WOLVES,

    ====
    If you find a partner, your recital pattern could be an echo with different voices narrating the rhyming lines written in parallel structures and rhyme. The happy tree part delivered in a soft voice will be in a sharp contrast to the wolf role marked with anguish and desperation. Try and see if it works. If it does, document this change in the production log.

    Comment by JGR7 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Production Log
      Title: Cherry Tree – Wolves
      Project: Diamond Verses
      Concept:
      Process: I went to the library to look the artwork by students in Art-1 Class. I compared the contrast between two mosaic. I wrote a poem. I need to present this poem in a digital process.
      Problems: I had not a problem with the work, but other students were distracting me by making noises while I was trying to make my work.
      Solutions:I concentrated without matter the noises the other students were making, I just ignored them.
      Lessons Learned: I learned that I have to continue working and focusing in my work ignoring the people that are causing disruptions.

      Text:
      Process: I wrote the poem with the ideas I had then a use a shape like a triangle to get some rhyme.
      Problems: I had some problems in the spelling words.
      Solutions: I used some spelling tools such dictionaries and vocabulary.
      Lessons Learned: I learned how to use vocabulary and dictionaries I also learned how skills are important in the promotion of poetry.

      Comment by JGR7 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  21. Snake
    beautiful
    dry
    hiss
    slither
    The frog
    jump
    croack
    moist
    colorful

    Comment by OL7 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Production log
      Project diamond verses
      Title:the frog

      Concept:I went to library to look the art picture and than I wrote a poem about them compare both poem.
      Problems:i had no problems with any work I did.
      Solutions:i was trying to focus when some students was taking and making noise.
      Lessons learned:i learned how to compare two ideas.
      Text
      Process:i went to the library to look the picture I compare to ideas about the picture.
      problems:i have no problems with this project.
      solutions:i focus on the project to do the best I can.
      lesson learned:i learned how to compare two ideas.

      Comment by OL7 | May 20, 2010 | Reply

  22. Parrot
    Blue, fly
    standing, flying, eating
    sun color moon dark
    standing,looking, running
    black, run
    wolves

    Comment by CL6 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

  23. flower
    bud petal
    shining growing smiling
    beauty attractive varety colors
    flying drinking moving
    lava wings
    butterfly

    Comment by ss6 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

  24. blue parrot
    beatiful,colorful
    singing,flying

    flying,eating
    beatiful,atractive
    butterflies
    ===
    Try to use the verbs “flit,” “flutter,” “patter.” This text needs imagery. And more work. Serious work.
    ===
    ???
    a bold parrot patter:
    voice -noise

    words singing colors???
    amusing mosaic ???
    colors flying in the air

    wind – wings
    a blue butterfly flutter

    Comment by GH | April 16, 2010 | Reply

  25. Wolves
    scary, wild
    howling, growling, hunting
    dangerous
    long,bigger
    crawlng, hissing, coiling
    poisonous,powerful
    Snake

    ===
    As your editor, I suggest this change. Now, with a partner, you can narrate in two voices.
    ===
    wolves
    wild in the wide
    howling, growling, snarling,
    frightening fight
    venomous bite
    hissing, crawling, coiling
    power in poison
    viper

    Comment by kg | April 16, 2010 | Reply

  26. Flower
    bud petal

    shining growing smiling

    beauty attractive varety colors

    flying drinking moving

    lava wings

    butterfly

    ====
    As your editor, I proposed another reading on my Wiki. If you add a sentence or a prepositional phrase to your text, you’ll improve diction.
    For this text please correct the spelling and change the middle line – all words need to be nouns or adjectives. To have parallel structures, you must use “one form” = “part of speech” for all ideas. Example of adjectives:
    beautiful, attractive, colorful, etc.
    Example of nouns:
    Beauty, attraction, color, etc.
    See the revised text published on my Wiki.

    Comment by ss6 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept
      Process: write a sentence about 2 picture that you described in one poem and will present as a digital project.

      Problems::selection was easy
      Solutions:
      Lessons learned: you can describe pictures as a poem
      Text
      Process: step by step
      Problems:spelling , finding parts of the flower.
      Solutions:picture dictionary
      Lessons learned: new vocabulary , How to use a picture dictionary

      Comment by ss4 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  27. Sun Flowers
    petals, soft
    growthing
    life, nature, life, death
    biting,eating,swiming
    brave, dangerous
    Shark
    ===
    As your editor, I suggest this change:
    I would print it in two stanzas.
    ===
    Sunflowers
    with soft petals and rich seeds make the garden flourish.
    Life.

    Sharks
    with alarming fins and strong teeth make all perish.
    Death.

    Comment by vr6 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept
      Process: I started to plan my words.
      Problems:The problems the I had is how to started express my ideas.
      Solutions:I put everything in my ideas and I combine all of them.
      Lessons learned:How when you start to come with many ideas all comes well.

      Text
      Process: I stared to wrote a poem with all the ideas the I find also I use a shape like triangle.
      Problems:The problems the I had to do the text how to write the spelling.
      Solutions:I use dictionary and others tools to find the words with a good spelling.
      Lessons learned:I learn how you can do everything right with all tool do you have with you.

      Comment by veronica | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  28. Two birds in the tree:
    Beautiful, Small
    Swoping, tweeting, twitering
    Growth, Attractive, Live, Waddle
    Runing, Flying, Quacking
    Big, Fluffy
    One Duck in the Sun

    ===
    As your editor, I suggest this change:
    Work in progress
    ===
    Two birds in the tree:
    tweet-tweet
    birds – bright and feathery, ???

    ???Swoping, tweeting, twitering
    ???Growth, Attractive, Live, Waddle
    Runing, Flying, Quacking

    duck – ??? and fluffy
    quack-quack
    One Duck in the Sun

    Comment by AP6 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept:
      Process:I wrote a poem combine Two birds in the tree , and one Duck in the sum. And I need put nouns, objectives, and verbs.
      Problems: My problem is the title, because when I made my poem I don’t know which title is better for put in each picture.
      Solutions:I spent little time when I made my poem because I know what I need put in the poem.
      Lessons Learned:I learned how plan my poem, and combine and description two pictures in one poem.

      Text:
      Process:I wrote a poem using parallel Structions, and directions for get a great poem.
      Problems: My problems in the text is find the words, because I needed found words that be about the pictures.
      Solutions:I spent my memory in found the nouns, adjectives, and verbs.
      Lessons Learned:I learned how put the words in each place.

      Comment by AP6 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  29. Artist:DN.
    title:Poisonious Frog.

    Frog.
    Lives. Small.
    Jumping. Colors. Green.
    Animal. Smooth.
    Mouth. Ugly. eyes.
    Swiming. Skin.
    Water.

    Comment by rz6 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

  30. Coyote

    Black Fur

    Howling Creeping Hunting

    Catch Attack

    Roaring Springing Racing

    Striped Coat

    Tiger

    ====
    As your editor, you’d insert prepositional phrases in the middle
    “the excitement of the race”
    “the adventure of the chase”

    ====
    Coyote

    Black Fur

    Howling Creeping Hunting

    Catch
    the excitement of the race
    the adventure of the chase

    Attack

    Roaring Springing Racing

    Striped Coat

    Tiger

    Comment by ja2 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept
      Process: I make a poem. The poem is about a tiger and a coyote.
      Problems:the problem was that I couldn’t find the picture of a coyote.
      Solutions: I use a picture of a wolf but I still use the name of the coyote.
      Lessons learned: to pay attention.
      Text
      Process: I wrote a poem with 7 lines.
      Problems: I couldn’t find to much words that rime.
      Solutions: I use the dictionary.
      Lessons learned: to use the dictionary

      Comment by JA | May 6, 2010 | Reply

    • Video
      Process: I did the poem in movie maker I saved in Mosaic folder.
      Problems:the project didn’t save .
      Solutions:no solution
      Lessons learned: to make sure to save. Lerner more about Data management
      Audio (voice, music)
      Process: I record the poem and I saved in Mosaic folder.
      Problems:I deleted the data file form audacity project and I lost the narration
      Solutions:I have to record the poem in audacity again ,it took 3 tapes .
      Lessons learned: I was unprepared in future ,I need to know how to read help file
      .

      Comment by JA | May 18, 2010 | Reply

  31. road
    red long
    cars trailers tracks
    ricing missing claking
    boat ships launch
    blue big
    ocean

    ===
    As you editor, I suggest this recital pattern:
    ===
    road
    red long
    ocean
    blue big
    road
    racing clanking
    ocean
    Waving floating
    Road
    cars trailers trucks
    Ocean
    boats ships yachts

    Comment by jc2 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept
      Process: I write the poem the Principal was to combine two ideas. This was is about pictures

      Comment by jc2 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

    • Video
      Process:I write the project firs then I to be presentation.
      Problems:I struggled to grab the video.
      Solutions: I had to record again to much time.
      Lessons learned:I learned record my voice.
      Audio (voice, music)
      Process: I had to record my voice in the computer.
      Problems;I had many problems with my voice.
      Solutions:I had to practice recoding my voice.
      Lessons learned:I learned nothing,

      Comment by jc2 | May 18, 2010 | Reply

      • I think you missed an opportunity to learn how to mix soundtracks. You had a strong start. It’s also important to keep working through all stages of a project until you finish it.

        Comment by Dr.M | May 24, 2010

  32. Tiger
    Natural Creature

    Salvage Aggression Vilonce

    Cruelty Savagery Ferocity Aggressor

    Huracane Tornado Stom

    Natural Force

    Wind

    ===
    Excellent ideas and very strong vocabulary. I suggest this change:
    ===
    Tiger
    Natural Creature
    Cruel Ferocious
    Savagery Aggression Violence
    but by the cage –
    tamed
    but by the windmill –
    Destruction Disaster Death
    Hurricane Tornado Storm
    Strong Merciless
    Natural Force
    Wind

    Comment by RC2 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept:
      text: I start the poem with to many problems because Im no stand to much about my poem and Mrs. Marchenko help me with the poem.
      Process. I wrote the poem.
      Problems. I have problems with the poem when Im start because the tiger and wind y not to much relation and that two words buth Mrs.Marchenko help me and Im do it .
      solutions: I have solutions with the dictionary because when Im no stand one word Im use the dictionary and I find in the dictionary the dictionary is like my friend.
      Lessons Learned: This poem in the future can help me because is like a reflection I can use this when I have problems is like a my friend because I can reading this poem in the future because is my friend.

      Comment by RC:2 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

    • Production Log
      Title : Tiger – Wind
      Project : Diamond Verses

      Concept:
      Process: I needed to pick two pictures, write a poem in from of diamond about the two pictures, develop ideas, make a film.
      Problems:I chose two pictures but I didn’t write the poem. Because I didn’t come that day to school.
      Solutions:the I have to get a poem written by other student so I don’t get a zero.
      Lessons learned:Is always better to do your own work so you know what are you talking about.
      Text:
      Process:I need to write if the words in the diamond poem are adjective, noun, or verb.
      Problems:sometimes I don’t even know what I’m suppose to do.
      Solutions:Is better ask somebody to explain to you the better way to do it.
      Lessons learned:

      Comment by fa7 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

    • Video
      Process: I wrote the project first and the presentation because is the more important work in the project is like the teacher can check the project and she no need ask you a question and you can present a perfect project .
      Problems:I have problems with to many words because sometimes I’m no write the correct words and I’m no put the periods and the teacher help me.
      Solution:I have problem with the movie maker because when I’m start the project my movie maker is no like I’m waned because is to small but my solution is I can do it more big my project and I can put more pictures in my project.
      Lessons learned:i like my voice because I’m said to many difficult words in my project.
      Audio (voice, music)
      Process: When I’m start my project I’m need study first because I can’t said the words alone reading the poem and I’m study like 100 times first.
      Problems:I have problems with my voice because I’m record my voice like 4 times because when I’m reading I’m said the words to strong sometimes and I’m said to fast the words and is why I need record my voice to many times.
      Solutions:When I’m do it my project I have problems with the voice but my solution is record the voice and the movie more small and I’m read the poem first .
      Lessons learned:I like my project because when I’m do it I’m said to many difficult words and I like my project because I’m do it with my self.

      Comment by RC:2 | May 18, 2010 | Reply

      • Your soundtrack has energy. You said it like a poetry slam champion! YES!!!
        You should consider writing and reciting poetry. You have a talent. I’m not very knowlegeable about rap, but the energy you showed in the project is equally strong.

        Comment by Dr.M | May 24, 2010

    • Concept:
      Process: I needed to pick two pictures, write a poem in from of diamond about the two pictures, develop ideas, make a film.
      Problems:I chose two pictures but I didn’t write the poem. Because I didn’t come that day to school.
      Solutions:the I have to get a poem written by other student so I don’t get a zero.
      Lessons learned:Is always better to do your own work so you know what are you talking about.
      Text:
      Process:I need to write if the words in the diamond poem are adjective, noun, or verb.
      Problems:sometimes I don’t even know what I’m suppose to do.
      Solutions:Is better ask somebody to explain to you the better way to do it.
      Lessons learned:there is always somebody who can tell you what to do.
      Video:
      process:I need to make a video about the poem of the tiger and the wind.
      problems:I didn’t make my video correct because I put only 2 pictures so I have to do it again.
      solutions:I do the video again and correct the mistakes.
      Lessons learned:You have to revise everything for mistakes before you turn it in.
      audio:
      process:I need to make an audio to my video.
      problems:I did the audio but it was wrong .
      solutions:I have to record the audio again.
      Lessons learned: Is better to do everything on time so you don’t have to worried about it

      Comment by fa7 | May 20, 2010 | Reply

  33. Wolf
    Gray Short

    Crying Walking Howling

    Moon Dark Sun Bright

    Moving Driving Honking

    Red Long

    Car
    ====
    As your editor, I suggest this change with the following recital pattern
    1> 2> 12> 11>1>3>12>10>1>4>5>6>12>9>8>7
    :
    ====
    (1)Wolf
    (2)chase and quick motion (Or: chase and fleeing)
    (3)Howling Walking Crying
    (4)the beast on the track
    (5)under dark gray
    (6)moon
    (7)at noon
    (8)under red sun
    (9)the beast on the track
    (10)Honking Moving Driving
    (11)race and emotion (Or: race and feeling)
    (12)Car

    Comment by Denisse | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept
      Process: I wrote a poem. It was about to compare two different things that are not related but they can have something in common
      Problems:I wasn’t able to find any words that can be related to each other and I didn’t know how to put the order
      Solutions:I found some dictionaries that helped me to find some words and my friends helped me how to put the order in a way that can be funny.
      Lessons learned:Always found some more resources and asked some friends to helped you.
      Text
      Process: I follow the steps that Mrs. Marchenko gave to complete these text that help a lot and guide to finish my poem a little bit better than I expect it.
      Problems:I was having problems finding words that compare them.
      Solutions:My teacher told that the dictionary can be a good friend so I grab the dictionary and start finding some words
      Lessons learned:Always find some other resource besides your brain.

      Comment by Denisse | May 6, 2010 | Reply

    • Concept
      Process: I wrote a poem. It was about to compare two different things that are not related but they can have something in common.
      Problems:I wasn’t able to find any words that can be related to each other and I didn’t know how to put them in order
      Solutions:I found some dictionaries that helped me to find some words and my friends helped me how to put the order in a way that can be engaging.
      Lessons learned:Always found some more resources and asked some friends to helped you.
      Text
      Process: I follow the steps in the writing process and complete it this text. Blank lines for each word in the poem helped a lot and guided to finish my poem a little bit better than I expected it.
      Problems:I was having problems finding words that compare them.
      Solutions:My teacher told that the dictionary can be a good friend so I grab the dictionary and start finding some words
      Lessons learned:Always find some other resource besides your brain.

      Comment by Denisse | May 7, 2010 | Reply

    • Video
      Process: I got the pictures from the Wikispace and the music from soundzabound.com it was really easy getting it.
      Problems:I didn’t have my two picture of the car and the wolf
      Solutions:I made credits about the wolf and that works for me.
      Lessons learned:We can learn how to make it have sense and to make it look pretty with just thinking about it.
      Audio (voice, music)
      Process: I had to record my voice so I can tell my poem with my racial patern
      Problems:I wasnt able to make my voice sound like my ratial patern.
      Solutions:I had to practice more often but even with the practice it couldn’t sound like I wanted.
      Lessons learned:Practice makes perfect.

      Comment by Denisse | May 18, 2010 | Reply

      • Did you mean to say “RECITAL PATTERN” – the order in which you say the lines of a diamond poem?
        Your soundtrack turned out pretty good, I like your choice of music.

        Comment by Dr.M | May 24, 2010

  34. Posted for LR1
    seahorse
    a creature of the sea
    swimming brown living
    real wet dry imaginary
    provoking attractive colorful longliving
    a product of imagination
    “Mosequik”
    ====
    As your editor, I suggest this change:
    ====
    seahorse
    a wet and real
    creature of the sea
    swimming and living
    as a tile in the ocean
    of mosaics
    as a colorful motion
    provoking and being
    creation of imagination
    a weird and surreal
    “Mosequik”

    Comment by Dr.M | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Production Log
      Title: Idea1 Idea2 (replace this line with your concepts)
      Project: Diamond Verses
      Concept
      Process: I wrote a poem. The principle was to compare and contrast two ideas taken from the mosaics.
      Problems:I like the picture but I don’t understand the figure mosequik
      Solutions:mosequik is like moseic plus quik
      Lessons learned:
      Text
      Process:
      Problems:
      Solutions:
      Lessons learned:

      Comment by LR1 | May 6, 2010 | Reply

  35. car
    on the road
    red fast moving
    speed success success achievement
    tall fancy standing
    in the city
    skyscraper

    Comment by sv1 | April 16, 2010 | Reply

    • Video
      Process: I got the picture from the website. I save the the picture in mosaic folder. I imported the picture in photo story.
      Problems:the problems something was wrongs with the tittle for the text of the poem.
      Solutions:windows movie maker was used to add poem and credits (tittle overlay).
      Lessons learned:I need to work more with technology.
      Audio (voice, music)
      Process: I used audacity I recorded my voice tree times then I imported the music soundzaound.com to audacity. I mixed the two soundtracks.
      Problems:the Problems was that photo story does not work with audacity
      Solutions:export sound as mp3 or wave.
      Lessons learned:how to add music to media project.

      Comment by sv1 | May 17, 2010 | Reply


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